Thursday, April 15, 2010

Teaser Thursday

This one is a complete change from everything I've ever done. Not sure where it's going yet, but thought I'd put it out there. It's either paranormal or contemporary depending on how I answer all the what-ifs.
His breath condensed in a glistening cloud on the window in front of him. He swirled his fingers through the droplets, only realizing after the fact that he had spelled out her initials again. KLP. How long would this keep happening? She had been gone for over two months.

The wind swirled gray fingers across the sky and stirred the fresh snow under the window into waves on the lawn. The thought of all that clean, crisp white would normally have been exciting, with snowball fights and skiing and hot chocolate. His love for those things was buried in dark and dreary feelings, just like the dark earth buried Katie in its cold embrace.

"She was the best thing that ever happened to me," he thought. He rubbed out the initials on the windowpane and wiped his wet hand on his jeans. He closed his eyes and lived through it all again. The horrible screeching sound of the tires as the car skidded across the pavement. The metallic tang in the air as the front end of the car crumpled against the tree. The pool of gasoline that mixed with the dripping red of Katie’s blood.


Talli Roland said...

Love that he rubbed out her initials at the end. Symbolic without being too obvious.

Great stuff!

Shannon O'Donnell said...

Wow. Very powerful and beautiful at the same time. I love this, Kayeleen. His voice is so real. I'd keep reading A LOT longer! :-)

Elana Johnson said...

Great job! I like this a lot. I hope you go with it. And if my vote counts, which I'm sure it doesn't, I'd go for paranormal. I just like that kind of stuff. :)